When I saw The pyramids of Giza for the first time, their
size and age took my breath away. In the summer of 2001, my mother and I went
to Cairo, Egypt. I was surprised to learn that the pyramids are about 4,500
years old. Another surprise was that in all the pictures I've seen the pyramids
look fairly smooth, but when I saw them close up, I amazed to see that they are
constructed of large blocks and are quite rough in appearance. The pyramids of
Giza are one of the only wonders of the ancient world still standing.
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ive always wondered how they carried all the stones to build it.
ReplyDeleteyou could put more details about how you felt when you were there
That is really cool you got to go to Egypt. I also thought the pyramids were smooth, it's good that you put that point in there.
ReplyDeleteI love this, I feel like I wish you had put me in a reading scenario where I felt like I was there, but none the less, I have always had an obsession with Egyptian culture!
ReplyDeleteIv'e read stories and a little bit of art history about the pyramids but seeing it in actuality will be fun and will love to see it. Your story is awesome.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your essay, I wish that I could go see the pyramids myself someday. I hope that you could tell me what else you saw while seeing the pyramids.
ReplyDeleteIt's amazing that you've been to see the Pyramids... honestly I'd want to see them, but I can barely tolerate the hot weather here. I'd burn up in a desert!
ReplyDeletei liked how you picked a memory that you obviously had a strong connection with. It wasn't a recent memory, but an older memory that you can cherish forever.
ReplyDeleteI believe you could have improved on conveying the cultural significance of the Pyramids of Giza rather than state a few physical descriptions of it. For example, what is so historical about it that makes it one of the wonders of the ancient world?
I wish I could see the pyramids! I like your use of personal significance and providing a small bit of history about the pyramids.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I would improve upon would be to add more cultural significance. For instance, what do they mean to the country of Egypt? or the entire world? Overall, well done.
Wow, I wish I could see the pyramids! Your personal connection really made the pyramids come alive. I agree with Joe on this one. Obviously the pyramids are important to Egypt, but mentioning that to a reader that has no idea about the pyramids would be helpful. I really liked your blog, it's so interesting!
ReplyDeleteI've always found the pyramids to be very mysterious and interesting at the same time. I'm very jealous that you were able to see them in person.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I can think of to help improve your post is perhaps choosing some more intriguing words. Other than that it looks great!
It is wonderful of you to share your experiences of the pyramids and a part of cherished memories you shared with your mother.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Kevin and Joe about cultural significance.
Visiting Egypt and the pyramids is on my bucketlist and I would love to go as soon as I can. It's awesome that you've visited and could experience the culture! I really liked how you used your own personal experience and feelings to describe the pyramids and the area in general.
ReplyDeleteAlthough you could have made your title more interesting, I enjoy reading about your visiting trip to Egypt and see the pyramids. I would sure do that one day.
ReplyDeletevery nice post makes me want to visit Egypt even more.
ReplyDeleteWould love to visit Egypt one day. I really like the last sentence.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your description and like that you included facts that you discovered by traveling there.
ReplyDeleteI think its really cool that you showed what expectations you had of this wonder and then commented on how what you saw was not exactly what you expected. I would love to know more about why these pyramids are important to you besides the fact that you visited them.
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