I remember
asking my mom why. My mother said, "You will understand why when you are a
bit older." I was 6 years old when my mother told me the news. I was
devastated when I found out that my mother was leaving me behind to go to
U.S.A. I remember waiting for my mom at the
airport I was hoping that it was a joke and that my mother would come back home sometime soon, but there was no sign of my her. I started to
cry when I realized that my mother wasn't coming back. I felt betrayed and abandoned.
My life wasn't that great before my mom left but i was happy. My life got a lot better after my mom left:.She sent money back home, because of it I was able to go to a better school, had a better clothes to wear and had the best food to eat. I wasn't happy even though I had everything I ever wanted, because my mother wasn't with me.
Six years later, I was excited to find out that my mother will bring me to the U.S.A. I was nervous and happy at the same time while waiting for my mom at the airport. When my mom saw me she came running and gave me a big hug, she held me like I was coming a part. We were both crying while holding each other.
I saw how happy my mother was. She told me that leaving me behind was one of the hardest things she ever had to do. I realized that she sacrificed a lot for my happiness. I Finally realized what my mother meant when she said "You will understand why I had to leave when you get older."
My life wasn't that great before my mom left but i was happy. My life got a lot better after my mom left:.She sent money back home, because of it I was able to go to a better school, had a better clothes to wear and had the best food to eat. I wasn't happy even though I had everything I ever wanted, because my mother wasn't with me.
Six years later, I was excited to find out that my mother will bring me to the U.S.A. I was nervous and happy at the same time while waiting for my mom at the airport. When my mom saw me she came running and gave me a big hug, she held me like I was coming a part. We were both crying while holding each other.
I saw how happy my mother was. She told me that leaving me behind was one of the hardest things she ever had to do. I realized that she sacrificed a lot for my happiness. I Finally realized what my mother meant when she said "You will understand why I had to leave when you get older."
Its hard to understand why people do things without knowing their motives.
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This was very touching. My feedback though would be to show us how you felt. You got down to the down and dirty and told us what happened, and luckily it ended up being only 193 words. Now, tell us how you felt about it! Did you cry when she left? Did you feel abandoned? Were you confused about the money? Show us! This will end up being great!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Kevin. Like we talked about in the story circle, I think showing us what happened instead of just saying your mother "was happy". Did you meet in the airport? I think showing us that scene would make it even better.
ReplyDeleteyou should add more details in the story like the first time you saw your mom after 6 years, etc. It's a great story! i love it
ReplyDeleteI really like your story and a really profound one, there are some grammatical errors but nothing too serious. I totally agree with the 3 above comments said earlier on. That's about it I think your story is a great story and I can't wait to see the digital story. Thanks a lot for your comment on my profile and the clip you sent me.
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